My Makassar
Formerly Makassar known as UjungPandang, but since 2000 UjungPandang changed become Makassar, where this name known and added in negarakertagama poems, prapanca's arrangement. Beside that formerly Makassar as a big trader centre and a big anchorage in east Indonesia, so is that why Makassar become the south celebes capitol that located front of makassar straits.
Makassar city is a cosmopolis city, because there are so many kinds of ethnic, bugis, button, batak, jawa, and almost tionghoa and etc. However the day life go on with peace and understanding to another, because they are become makassar peoples.
As a city that contiguous with makassar straits, Makassar have a lot of tourism place, like losari beach that located in west Makassar side, this beach is most beautiful place to enjoy the sunset in the evening, formerly losari beach added in record book or guinnes book's as longest seafood centre o
r longest dinning table in the world. Beside losari beach Fort Rotterdam is also the most tourism place where we can find so many foreign tourist and local tourist. On this place there are a museum where we can find very much relic from the ancient time, and then on the top this fortres we can enjoy the beautiful view of losari beach.
Good.
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Bandung is my beautiful home town. There are many things that can attract you when you go to Bandung. Such as many restaurant in North Bandung which provide good view. Not only good view , but also the cleanliness.
[give real example of the restaurant, and the cleaness] Today almost in Bandung’s road is ‘nt found any rubbish. Because the government has a new program that rubbish must be put out on its place. And to separate them into different categories, like organic, non organic, plastics. [ this will not attract me at all, you should write something else, this is irrelevant]I
n the past , Bandung was called the city of flower. Imajine that a city which called like that , it must be really beatiful city. Now Bandung has changed but the plants, the flowers, the spirits never change untill now..[ this does not make me visit Bandung]Come n Visit Bandung…
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Jakarta, The Neverending Excitement
Jakarta, formerly known as Batavia back in colonial-era, is perhaps the busiest city in Indonesia. That's because Jakarta is the capital city of Indonesia, all the governmental-things and big business happened there. Eventhough some people said that Jakarta
ain't [spoken language] the place for live but the place to make a living, I do enjoy live there. There is some reasons for me to loved Jakarta.
First one is the people. Jakarta is like a one big melting-pod. You can meet different type of people in Jakarta from various
race [plural??]. The Betawi, the native, are humorous kind of people. The chinese one that you can find on North side of Jakarta, are great in business. They are also kind with anyone. There is also The Indian, The Batakese, The Javanese, and others that have their own personality. The diversity, that's why I love Jakarta.
Another reason is the infrastructure. As the capital city, Jakarta has it all. From multi-storey skyscraper buildings, huge shopping arcades, old museums, to Jakarta's own busway called Transjakarta. So, everything that we need is provided by the city.
The last thing that I loved about Jakarta is the festivals. Jakarta has many festivals, such as Jakarta Fair during July to celebrate Jakarta's birthday.
Or perhaps, [spoken language]the regional festivals like Kemang Festival, Tebet Festival, and many others. For moviegoers, Jakarta also has its own annual movie festival called Jiffest (Jakarta International Film Festival) every November/December. That's not all, since 2005 Jakarta conducted an International Jazz music festival, The Jakarta International Java Jazz Festival that featured local talents and also international musicians.
Now you know why I really love my hometown. Because Jakarta has the neverending-excitement. Come and enjoy Jakarta!
Very organized writing. Thanks
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My lovely students,
After reading your work I would like you to read the explanation below;
The paragraph.The purpose of this handout is to give some basic instruction and advice regarding the creation of understandable and coherent paragraphs.
What is a paragraph?A paragraph is a collection of related sentences dealing with a single topic. To be as effective as possible, a paragraph should contain each of the following: Unity, Coherence, A Topic Sentence, and Adequate Development. As you will see, all of these traits overlap. Using and adapting them to your individual purposes will help you construct effective paragraphs.
1. Unity:The entire paragraph should concern itself with a single focus. If it begins with a one focus or major point of discussion, it should not end with another or wander within different ideas.
2. Coherence:Coherence is the trait that makes the paragraph easily understandable to a reader. You can help create coherence in your paragraphs by creating logical bridges and verbal bridges.
I like this classI like this class for three reasons. The first reason is that the teacher is friendly. I think this reason is the most important because if the teacher friendly that can make us more interested on study. In addition, if the teacher friendly between students and teacher we can have a good communication. The second reason is that there are very few people in this class. Therefore the teacher can spend more time on students who have problems and also can take care of everyone. The last one is that this class only focuses on writing and grammar so I believe that I can improve my weakness in writing and grammar. For these four reasons I think I will enjoy in this class.logical bridges:
* The same idea of a topic is carried over from sentence to sentence
* Successive sentences can be constructed in parallel form
verbal bridges:
* Key words can be repeated in several sentences
* Synonymous words can be repeated in several sentences
* Pronouns can refer to nouns in previous sentences
* Transition words can be used to link ideas from different sentences
3.
A topic sentence:A topic sentence is a sentence that indicates in a general way what idea or thesis the paragraph is going to deal with. Although not all paragraphs have clear-cut topic sentences, and despite the fact that topic sentences can occur anywhere in the paragraph (as the first sentence, the last sentence, or somewhere in the middle), an easy way to make sure your reader understands the topic of the paragraph is to put your topic sentence near the beginning of the paragraph. (This is a good general rule for less experienced writers, although it is not the only way to do it).
4. Adequate developmentThe topic (which is introduced by the topic sentence) should be discussed fully and adequately. Again, this varies from paragraph to paragraph, depending on the author's purpose, but writers should beware of paragraphs that only have two or three sentences. It's a pretty good bet that the paragraph is not fully developed if it is that short.
Some methods to make sure your paragraph is well-developed:
* Use examples and illustrations
* Cite data (facts, statistics, evidence, details, and others)
* Examine testimony (what other people say such as quotes and paraphrases)
* Use an anecdote or story
* Define terms in the paragraph
* Compare and contrast
* Evaluate causes and reasons
* Examine effects and consequences
* Analyse the topic
* Describe the topic
* Offer a chronology of an event (time segments)
Paragraphs are units of thought with one idea developed adequately. Listed here are some rules of thumb to use when paragraphing. As your writing improves, you'll be able to break these "rules" to meet your own needs. Until then, these suggestions can be helpful:
* Put only one main idea per paragraph.
* Aim for three to five or more sentences per paragraph.
* Include on each page about two handwritten or three typed paragraphs.
* Make your paragraphs proportional to your paper. Since paragraphs do less work in short papers, have short paragraphs for short papers and longer paragraphs for longer papers.
* If you have a few very short paragraphs, think about whether they are really parts of a larger paragraph--and can be combined--or whether you can add details to support each point and thus make each into a more fully developed paragraph.
r longest dinning table in the world. Beside losari beach Fort Rotterdam is also the most tourism place where we can find so many foreign tourist and local tourist. On this place there are a museum where we can find very much relic from the ancient time, and then on the top this fortres we can enjoy the beautiful view of losari beach.
